Karl McMichel Intro

In The Story of an hour by Kate Chopin it is expressed in great detail that in a male dominated society arranged marriages held people captive and forced them to love against their will. In the story Mrs. Mallard is afflicted with heart trouble that seems to limit her ability to do certain things. After hearing the news that her husband Brently Mallard has died, she runs to her room crying as if it’s the worst news of her life. Ironically there is an overwhelming since of freedom that can’t be explained comes over her, but in the end she drops dead when Mr. Mallard shows up still alive. In the institute of marriage husband are suppose to be soul mates. Any woman would be devastated to find out that their husband has died if they unquestionably love them. In The Story of an hour Mrs. Mallard has a since of freedom as if her heart condition is healed as if a weight is lifted off of her. If during this time in history marriage is arranged it could be the cause of Mrs. Mallard being held captive and the reason there was never true love in her marriage that lead to a disastrous end.

The Yellow wallpaper by “Charlotte Perkins Gillman” is a story that demands her audience to unlock a world of unimaginable thinking. Gilliam introduce us to a character that husband is a doctor. The characters’ husband John is to some extent overworked and aggressively overprotective of his wife. He only means well by his wife but his over-protectiveness and deprived attention to her may be the cause of many of her problems. The character suffers from a nervous condition that consequently results in hallucinations, depression and ultimately her mental stability. Her husband locks her away from the outside world to become “better” but this only makes matters more troubling. Being trapped in a room alone with yellow wallpaper, she struggles to understand her reasoning of living. The yellow wallpaper eventually takes on an imaginary behavioural form that only goes on in the characters mind. John could be more sympathetic to his wife and this would probably relive some of the stress that goes on inside of her mind. There seems to not be a real solution to any of her problems. The wall paper and isolation inside of the room evidently plays a real significance in way her sanity is being put at risk.




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paper revisions...brandi brady

In "The Story of an Hour," (1894), Kate Chopin shows us the lack of independence/ self-assertion in women and its affect on love in the nineteenth century. The main character, Louis Mallard, has a serious heart problem which is taken into consideration when her sister Josephine and Mr. Mallard's friend, Richards, arrive at the Mallard's home to gently announce the news of Mr. Brently Mallard's death expressed in the newspaper office. When Mrs. Mallard receives the information she weeps as she dismisses herself , going into a room alone leaving her sister worried. Ironically, as Josephine tries to get Louis Mallard to open the door, we are introduced to Mrs. Mallard's changing emotions about her husband's death. She realizes that she is now living for herself and that being a widow might not be a terrible experience. As she finally opens the door and walk down the steps with Josephine, Mr. Mallard opens the front door. Richard's tries to block Mrs. Mallard's view of her husband but he is too late as she dies of a heart disease. Chopin's story is meant to open the reader's eyes on the significance of self assertion. Though Chopin expresses that Brently Mallard treated Mrs. Mallard well, we still see more relief from Louis Mallard for becoming a widow the longer she sits thinking. Chopin's point seems to be that true emotions will come out if it's expressed to an individual or behind closed doors.


That was my introduction. Now that I reread it over and over again, I do see things that I can fix but I still have some questions. Is my summary too long? Does it give details that I can use in my body paragraphs. I put a sentence in bold on purpose because that is one sentence that I think that I can eliminate but then I do not think that the paper will sound accurate if it goes from the previous sentence to the following sentence. My topic sentence for my next paragraph is......

Chopin's goal in the story is to challenge the reader's assumption on love and its level of importance compared to independence/ self-assertion.

I feel like I'm repeating something. I need feedback!

PAPER REVISIONS! (Come one, come all!)

PAPER REVISIONS (some common issues to consider as you revise):

Language:

1. Spelling / Typos (This is an easy fix, guys. Don't get a lower grade because of something so silly and easy to fix!)

2. Grammar
Subject-Verb agreement
Syntactical error (fragments, run-ons, funky working)

3. Punctuation
Commas, semi-colons (;), colons (:), periods (.)… (If you couldn't tell me when it's right to use any one of these punctuation marks, either avoid using it, or figure out how to use it correctly. I'll try to give some examples in blog posts tomorrow and over the weekend.)

4. Mechanics of quotation
Block quotes (no quotation marks) / In-text quotations (use quotations marks)

5. Paragraph identification (See paragraph structure below.)

Stucture:

1. Introduction → Body → Conclusion
2. Paragraph Structure
A. Intro Structure
a. Topic Sentence (Is it arguable? Can I disagree?)
b. Summary (2-3 Sentence – Avoid unnecessary details. Ask, why am I including this? Does it serve the purposes of my paper?)
c. Commentary
d. Concluding Sentence /Thesis

PARAGRAPH ELEMENTS...TAKE NOTE.

**Examples
(Are they introduced? Do you have any? Block Quote? Paragraph w/ question? Details from the story? Are the examples substantial enough?)

**Commentary
(Does the commentary explain how the example develops the idea in your topic sentence?)

**Concluding Sentence
(Does it lead to the next paragraph?)

*Concluding PARAGRAPH
(Does it tie your argument/claim to the experience of your readers?)

Young Goodman Brown by Micheal Fisher

After reading Young Goodman Brown, I noticed a lot of symbolism. Different things and sayings were used in many different ways to represent more than one purpose, from the name FAITH (having a sense of comfort and believing in something isn't concrete), to the pink ribbon (conrete symbol of FAITH), Goodman - Good Man, Symbolic figures(devil), etc.

Overall, the story gave the readers a sense to think whats the truth about who(or what) is good or evil.

Young Goodman Brown by Deangelo Toles

Overall, this was a good short story even tho it took me a minute to figure out what the story was really about. I had to go back & read certain parts over because I really couldn't understand the terminology that was being worded in the story. After, we went over it in class, it started to make alot more sense. So I went home and read it over and I started to understand the story & what Hawthorne was really getting at.

young goodman Brown by mekina caldwell

This story was interesting, but also very confusing to me. What made it confusing, was that one minute they mention things realted to christinanty, then they go on to talk about stuff like witches, and the devil. I don't know whether he was dreaming. I could not get into this story like I wanted to, because it was confusing. I think whatever that was that was making him think about all that stuff, was a warning of something that could happen in the future, I am not sure though.